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Gerv and Stacy recommend: both. Consistency is good, as is strength. | Gerv and Stacy recommend: both. Consistency is good, as is strength. | ||
Mitchell: Altered #4 seems better to me; agree here. Altered number 3 feels a bit weird. But I agree with the consistency piece. So agree with the recommendation of changing both. | |||
===Change 'goals' to 'profit'=== | ===Change 'goals' to 'profit'=== | ||
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Gerv and Stacy recommend: both. | Gerv and Stacy recommend: both. | ||
Mitchell: There are a bunch of nuances here, but I think this change is good. Commercial goals could include great user experience, etc, but the piece we want to balance is where the benefit ("profit" in a larger, non-monetary sense, e.g., "benefit") accrues. | |||
So, agree with recommendation. | |||
===Comma Removal #5=== | ===Comma Removal #5=== | ||
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Gerv and Stacy recommend: both. Consistency is good. | Gerv and Stacy recommend: both. Consistency is good. | ||
Mitchell: hah, i learned comma etiquette in law school, and perhaps acceptable style guides have changed even there. OK with recommendation. | |||
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Gerv and Stacy recommend: neither. The mental pause caused by the comma is useful in parsing the sentence. | Gerv and Stacy recommend: neither. The mental pause caused by the comma is useful in parsing the sentence. | ||
Mitchell: OK either way, happy to defer to your sense of ease of parsing. So OK with recommendation. | |||
==Summary of Changes== | |||
Summary of approved text changes: | |||
*Principle #3 - replace "should" with "must" | |||
*Principle #4 - add "and privacy" after "security" and replace "cannot" with "must not" | |||
*Principle #5 - add "the Internet, and" after "shape" and replace "it" with "the Internet". | |||
*Principle #8 - remove the comma after "accountability" | |||
*Principle #9 - change "goals" to "profit" | |||