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Gerv and Stacy recommend: both. Consistency is good. | Gerv and Stacy recommend: both. Consistency is good. | ||
Mitchell: hah, i learned comma etiquette in law school, and perhaps acceptable style guides have changed even there. OK with recommendation. | |||
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Gerv and Stacy recommend: neither. The mental pause caused by the comma is useful in parsing the sentence. | Gerv and Stacy recommend: neither. The mental pause caused by the comma is useful in parsing the sentence. | ||
Mitchell: OK either way, happy to defer to your sense of ease of parsing. So OK with recommendation. | |||
==Summary of Changes== | |||
Summary of approved text changes: | |||
*Principle #3 - replace "should" with "must" | |||
*Principle #4 - add "and privacy" after "security" and replace "cannot" with "must not" | |||
*Principle #5 - add "the Internet, and" after "shape" and replace "it" with "the Internet". | |||
*Principle #8 - remove the comma after "accountability" | |||
*Principle #9 - change "goals" to "profit" | |||