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'''Rationale''': Additional words that are not central to the meaning can be removed to make the Manifesto crisper. In #4, the word "Individuals'" can be removed. This has the added benefit of further differentiating the first word of #4 from the first word of # 5. | '''Rationale''': Additional words that are not central to the meaning can be removed to make the Manifesto crisper. In #4, the word "Individuals'" can be removed. This has the added benefit of further differentiating the first word of #4 from the first word of # 5. Note that the proposed version incorporates an additional change that is explained in section 4.2 below. | ||
'''Approved #4''': Individuals' security and privacy on the Internet are fundamental and cannot be treated as optional. | '''Approved #4''': Individuals' security and privacy on the Internet are fundamental and cannot be treated as optional. | ||
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'''Alternate #4''': Security and privacy on the Internet are fundamental and cannot be treated as optional. | '''Alternate #4''': Security and privacy on the Internet are fundamental and cannot be treated as optional. | ||
'''Proposed #4''': | '''Proposed #4''': Security and privacy on the Internet are fundamental and must not be treated as optional. | ||
===Consistent use of the words "must" and "must not" === | ===Consistent use of the words "must" and "must not" === | ||