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'''Rationale''': These are additional text change suggestions that came after the initial approvals. They are intended to make the Manifesto crisper. | '''Rationale''': These are additional text change suggestions that came after the initial approvals. They are intended to make the Manifesto crisper. | ||
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'''Rationale''': Additional words that are not central to the meaning can be removed to make the Manifesto crisper. In #4, the word "Individuals'" can be removed. This has the added benefit of further differentiating the first word of #4 from the first word of # 5. Note that the proposed version incorporates an additional change that is explained in section 4.2 below. | '''Rationale''': Additional words that are not central to the meaning can be removed to make the Manifesto crisper. In #4, the word "Individuals'" can be removed. This has the added benefit of further differentiating the first word of #4 from the first word of # 5. Note that the proposed version incorporates an additional change that is explained in section 4.2 below. | ||